II.11. Exercise 11 - Opinion paragraph - Peer editing

23/10/2019 - 9:10 pm - Opinion paragraph - Peer editing.

Today, we wrote paragraphs, which we exchanged, so we had to correct the paragraphs of our classmates. Thus, we practiced peer-editing on our opinion paragraphs. We then had to answer the questions below. At the beginning of my work, I also put my classmate's paragraph as he gave it to me.

 I- Peer-Editing Worksheet 1 - Chapter 1: Paragraph Format

1). Is the paragraph interesting ? 

YES

Was the person written about already familiar to you, or did you learn about this person from reading the paragraph ? 

Already familiar to me

Write a comment about a part that is especially interesting to you.

I find interesting the part about the pressure put on children by teachers or parents, to have good marks in history or mathematics.

2). Do you understand everything ? 

Yes

Circle or underline any part that you do not understand, and write a comment about it.

I don’t circle or underline nothing, because the paragraph is very clear and I understand all the ideas of the writter.

3). How many sentences are they in the paragraph ? 

There are six sentences in this paragraph.

Would you like more information about anything ? 

YES

If your answer is yes, write down what you would like to know more about.

I would have liked more information about how or why school is killing out the children’s creativity. Maybe more information to really get to the bottom of the subject.

4). Check the format, (title, indenting, spacing, margins, etc…). Make a note about anything that seems incorrect to you.

The title is a question, but in my opinion, it can be perceived as a title so I don't see any problem with it. After, I see that it miss an indent at the beginning of the paragraph, and it’s really built as a block, so there are not really spaces to read it clearly.

5). In your opinion, what is the best feature of this paragraph ? In otherwords, what is this writer’s best writing skill ?

For me, the writer’s best writing skill is that the text is very understandable and fluid, i. e. all ideas are clearly linked, so it is very easy to understand.

II- Peer-Editing Worksheet 2 - Chapter 2: Paragraph Structure

3). Copy the topic sentence here, and circle the topic and underline the controlling idea.

The topic sentence is « Indeed, nowadays the system education focuses on the general subjects such as mathematics, history, geography… ». I put a picture below, where I circle the topic and underline the controlling ideas.

4). How many supporting sentences are there in the paragraph ?

In this paragraph, I see three supporting sentences.

Is there at least one example for every supporting point ? NO

6). If the paragraph has a concluding sentence, copy it here and circle the end-of-paragraph signal (if there is one).

The concluding sentence is « The education should definitely give more space to the creativity and give more importance on art subjects like music or dance… in order to let children express their creativity ». I’m not sure that there is a good end-of-paragraph signal, but if I have to elect one, I I'd choose what I highlighted.

III- Peer-Editing Worksheet 5 - Chapter 5: Logical Division of ldeas

4). How many supporting points are there in the paragraph ?

I think there are four supporting points.

Is each point introduced by a transition signal ? 

Yes, except one.

Is there at least one example for every supporting point ? 

NO (there is one example in all the paragraph).